Week 6 Story: The Ultimate Fear
The group of teenagers sat around playing truth or dare.
"Okay Sofia, truth or dare?" asked Lydia.
"Truth." answered Sofia without any hesitation.
Lydia thought about what to ask and decided on, “What are you most scared by?”
Everyone turned to look at Sofia and waited for her to answer. She was trying to think of something that she was scared of but not a single thing came to mind. After a long silence, one of the other kids interrupted her train of thought.
“Are you even scared of anything? Enes asked with a slight hint of wonder to his voice.
“Not really.” answered Sofia.
“I’m calling BS,” said Anthony “there has to be something you’re afraid of, like ghost or things like that.”
“Honestly, that kind of things don’t scare me. Have you guys never noticed that I’m always bored during our horror movie marathons?” replied Sofia, “I watch ‘em because you guys like too, they’re not interesting to me.”
“What about heights? Or clowns?” asked Lydia.
“Nope, plus I grew up watching Cepillin so clowns have never seemed scary.”
“What about elevators?” asked Ethan.
“Like claustrophobia? No, but am I scared a demon going to kill me like in the movie Devil? Still no, that’s just you.”
Everyone chuckled at Sofia’s comment. Ethan threw a pillow at Sofia, it hit her in the face and she proceeded to laugh.
Everyone continued to ask her about common fears.
“Bugs?”
“Nope.”
“Snakes?”
“Nuh-uh.”
“Commitment?”
“Once again, that’s just you Ethan.”
“Death?”
“Not really, it’s prone to happen.”
“The dark?”
“Nah, it reminds me of my soul.” joked Sofia.
“Needles?”
“Negative.”
“How about-” before that sentence could be finished, Sofia’s phone rang.
Sofia looked down at the caller ID and then at the time displayed on the phone, her face seemed to pale. She finally answered the call.
“Hello?” responded Sofia.
The other teens could hear what sounded like yelling but weren’t able to make out what was being yelled. Soon enough after, the yelling finished and Sofia responded.
“I know, I’m on my way now. Bye, love you.” she ended the phone call and looked up to see everyone staring at her. “Why didn’t y’all tell me it was past 11?! My mom is going to kill me now.”
Soon enough everyone looked at each other and cheered.
“We found what you’re scared of!” shouted Anthony, “Your mom!”
“Shut up! You’re scared of your mom too!” replied Sofia as she ran out of the house and into her car. She sat there for a second, that phone call almost gave her a heart attack.
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Author's Note: This story is based off of one of Ignacz Kunos' tales from Forty-Two Turkish Fairy Tales. In the original, a young man asks his mother what fear is and then seeks to experience fear. After overcoming every experience without being scared, he is chosen as the next ruler and the wife of the former ruler seeks out to scare him. In the end, he gets scared when she puts a sparrow in a lidded dish, the youth opens it and get scared when the sparrow flies out. The story ends with them getting married. For my story I wanted to put it in a more modern setting and make it more realistic. I decided to change the main character to be a teenager named Sofia, who was playing truth or dare with her friends. I wanted to make the exploration of fears more simple so I decided to show it through dialogue. In the end, the things that scares her is when her mom calls her to yell at her for missing curfew.
Bibliography:
"Fear" from Forty-Two Turkish Fairy Tales by Ignacz Kunos. Web Source.
Hey Dora, very entertaining story! I initially clicked the link because well it's October now and time for some great scary stories! I really like the use of dialogue here and how it bounces around making be stay engaged in the story. I thought it was funny that in the end she was scared of her mother. But I mean, we kind of all can relate when we have got that call knowing that we were doing something we shouldn't be and somehow mom always finds out.
ReplyDeleteHi Dora! I loved this story. The way you described the opening scene was so simple but yet so descriptive, because I think most people who read that can relate back to a time when they were sitting around as a teenager with a bunch of their friends. I thought the way you built up to the end was really engaging, and I found myself smiling when I read the last paragraph. I think there are people that can definitely relate to that, too. Great job!
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ReplyDeleteI really liked this story, and the modern style take you decided to use. This is so funny, because I feel like a lot of readers can relate to this story and attribute it to a point in their life time. The dialogue was really good, and the way you constructed your sentences made the story make sense. Something that is minor, but might be effective in this story, is leaving a space between each line of dialogue so the words aren't cramped up with each person saying something. Otherwise, I really liked this story. You did a great job!
Hi Dora, what a story! Your story is so easy to relate to because I can remember countless times where I've experience that same feeling of dread when I'm out past curfew. Of course, I'm also afraid of bugs and spiders and what not, but this story was so funny. Great job with the dialogue and with adding humor into the story. Keep it up!
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