Week 7 Story: Must be Fate
It was just her luck. First, Elizabeth sleeps through her first few alarms and then when she does wake up, it’s because the tenants in the apartment below her were arguing.
Now, she just spilled the coffee she just bought on this cute guy in front of a whole bunch of people in a busy coffee shop.
“I am so sorry!” exclaimed Elizabeth, “Let me grab some napkins.”
“No, no. You’re fine.”, said the stranger calmly, “I was planning on throwing out this shirt anyway.”
One of the workers came up to the stranger.
“Are you okay, sir?” they asked the stranger, after he nodded they continued, “How about a drink on the house?”
“What am I, chopped liver?” mumbled Elizabeth, but the stranger still managed to hear her.
“That’d be nice.”, he turns to Elizabeth, “What would you like?”
After kindly insisting to Elizabeth that she should receive the free drink, Elizabeth finally accepted and thanked the stranger. Soon enough, Elizabeth got her new drink and the stranger got his order.
“I’m Elizabeth, by the way.” she said, “I thought I should let you know since I spilled a drink all over you.”
“David, I’m kind of glad you did though. Or else I never would have met you.” he winked as he left the coffee shop in a way that if Elizabeth were to attempt she would most likely fall, leaving Elizabeth is a sense of awe.
Weeks had passed before she bumped into David again.
“Elizabeth!” exclaimed David, “I’ve been wanting to see you again, I-”
He stops talking for a second, “I did not mean to say that out loud. And now, I’m really nervous and I just wanted to ask you out on a date but you probably think I’m being weird now. I’m just gonna go now.”
“Wait,” said Elizabeth, “I’d really like to take you up on that offer.”
“Consider me a lucky guy, then.”
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Author's Note: This story is based off of a Chinese Fairy Tale, where an unlucky princess marries a lucky beggar. The beggar goes off and becomes an emperor while his wife waits for him back home. As they are reunited again and she is to become the emperor's wife, she dies 18 days later. I wanted to retell this story in a somewhat more romantic sense where the ending is kind of ambiguous. I kept the unlucky female character and the lucky male character but I shifted the setting of the story.
Bibliography:
"The Favorite of Fortune and the Child of Ill Luck" from The Chinese Fairy Book by Richard Wilhelm. Web Source.
Hi Dora, you already attracted me into your story with your title! I was so entranced while reading your story. I am a huge fan of romantic stories and your story made me so happy. I like the setting you chose for your story and how you changed it from the original. I also like the dialogue between the characters rather than the story just strictly having 3rd person point of view.
ReplyDeleteHi Dora! I really loved that you based your story in the present-day! I think that situation could happen to anyone! I love romantic stories, where people end up together through the most random situation. I do like that you kept the ending of the story more of a mystery. We can only hope they ended up together.
ReplyDeleteHi Dora! First off your website is really lovely and elegant. I enjoyed this story very much, as it was very lifelike. I particularly liked that he made sure she got the free drink. A couple of thoughts - you switch between the present and past a bit. Also, I was somewhat confused by the sentence that starts 'he threw in a wink as he left.'
ReplyDeleteIt was late when I wrote this, so I think my mind was just ready to sleep. Thank you for pointing that out. I reread and found that some places didn't make sense the way I wanted them to. I appreciate the feedback.
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